In Your Opinion
Marvin Hill - Twister
The flower-fragrant breezes from the park today are stirring up tornadoes out east on the lone prarie.
So I'm playing with dialogue. What do you think? Is this realistic:
“What? What are you looking at?” she asked.
“You. Waking up next to you. Watching you make coffee. I want to do this every morning. For the rest of my life.”
He walked up behind her, then wrapped his arms around her and buried his face in her hair.
“Mmmm you smell so good.”
She closed her eyes, took her hands off the grinder and placed them on his biceps. They stood like that for long minutes, not saying anything, swaying slightly. She felt him breathe into her hair.
“I love that you’re wearing one of my shirts,” he whispered.
“It’s my favorite one on you.”
“Keep it. No, wait, don’t keep it. I want it back because you’ve been wearing it.”
Would a guy say that?